I came up with some cards, please rate or suggestions

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Tormented Soul :manabr:

Creature - Goblin Spirit - Uncommon

Fear, Haste

"Even after death, he raged"

1/1

Yep, [card:a25a18e539]Raging Goblin[/card:a25a18e539] after death.
Edit: I might add that at one mana it would be more like a Boros Recruit. Add another mana either another hybrid or colorless. WELLITS DECIDED, TORMENTED SOUL WINS!! I would take out the poll, but unfortunately I really dunno how to. I'll figure it out soon, no worries.



Mana Leash :g::u:

Enchantment- Aura - Uncommon

Enchant Creature
You can play this anytime you could play an instant.
Whenever enchanted creature deals combat damage, search your library for a basic land card and put it into play tapped. Shuffle your library afterwards.
:u: : Move Mana Leash from enchanted creature and move it onto another target creature.

"Held by the reins of mana, elves can speed the growth of nature"

Edit: Changed its mana cost tu blue/green. Seems pretty good now. Two. Might be hard to cast, but you never know til you try. Someone suggested putting +1/+1, however it'd become more green than blue. but since it is strictly worse than One with Nature, I chose to give him another ability for it's blue nature. I know the wording is rather off, but I hope it works and satisfy the Uncommon rarity.

Tenos, Law Enforcer :3mana: :w::w:

Legendary Creature- Human Advisor - Rare

Players can't attack you, unless they pay 2 mana for each creature they control.

"Once a humble farmer from the outskirts of Bromesia, now a cold-hearted bureaucrat. Amazing how ironic life is"- Tenos's father

2/5

Edit: Well, I agree with Ninja about the 2/5. Makes him more defensive in case creatures still manage to get in for the attack. I believe is pretty good as it is now.


Swallowing Fire :1mana::r::r:

Enchantment - Rare

Swallowing Fire comes into play with one charge counter.
At the beginning of your upkeep, deal damage equal to the amount of charge counters to each creature.
Sacrfice a land: Put a charge counter on Swallowing Fire.

"Fire! FIRE EVERYWHERE! RETREAT!"- Vintroh, Elven Commander

Edit: I dunno about the sacrifice land ability. But it's worth a shot. 'Sides, You can put a charge counter before the upkeep ability triggers. Pretty efficient.I also lowered it's cost for the same reason Luthervamplord gave. Any additional thoughts are welcomed.

[Yusuke]

Tormented Soul :manabr::manabr:
Creature - Goblin Spirit - Common
Fear, Haste
Whenever this creature attacks each player loses one life.
"Even after death, he raged"
1/1
Yep, [card:b705964bcd]Raging Goblin[/card:b705964bcd] after death. I dunno, but at two mana it could be too strong for a common, even an uncommon, maybe if it was 1(b/r)(b/r) it would be more controlled.
I think it's good as is..... However, it comes across as too black for my tastes. Maybe make it just :manabr: and just be a 1/1 Fear Haste

Mana Leash :managu::managu:
Enchantment- Aura - Uncommon
Enchant Creature
You can play this anytime you could play an instant.
Whenever enchanted creature deals combat damage, search your library for a basic land card and put it into play tapped. Shuffle your library afterwards.
"Held by the reins of mana, elves can speed the growth of nature"
Whats odd is I dont know whether or not this is better or worse than [card:b705964bcd]One with Nature[/card:b705964bcd]

Tenos, Law Enforcer :3mana::w::w:
Legendary Creature- Human Advisor - Rare
Players can't attack you unless they pay 2 mana for each creature they control.
"Once a humble farmer from the outskirts of Bromesia, now a cold-hearted bureaucrat. Amazing how ironic life is"- Tenos's father
1/3
Probably the power is too low. What would you guys say about a 2/3? Any other suggestions would be fine.
Either up the power or lower the cost.

Swallowing Fire :2mana::r::r:
Enchantment - Rare
Swallowing Fire comes into play with one charge counter.
At the beginning of your upkeep, deal damage equal to the amount of charge counters to each creature.
At end of turn, add or remove one charge counter from Swallowing Fire.
"Fire! FIRE EVERYWHERE! RETREAT!"- Vintroh, Elven Commander
Nice Idea... However, i don't see fire as diminishing at will... I think the mana cost should be reduced, and maybe there should be a sacrifice of lands. I dunno, the sacrifice just seemed more flavorful.

[Please post your thoughts on the cards or constructive criticism or don't post in the topic at all. -Yusuke]

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Ok, I edited, so anyone comment on the new changes. And post some ideas on how would you use it in a deck. Thanks to you all.

Also, tell me who would like the Black Goblin to maintain this ability:
"Whenever this creature attacks each player loses one life."

[thegeneralpublic]

Tormented Soul :manabr:
Creature - Goblin Spirit (Common)
Fear, Haste
"Even after death, he raged"
1/1
Yep, [card:695b4b9472]Raging Goblin[/card:695b4b9472] after death. I dunno, but at two mana it could be too strong for a common, even an uncommon, maybe if it was 1(b/r)(b/r) it would be more controlled.
You're right; this is way to good. I like your idea of :1mana::manabr::manabr:


Mana Leash :managu::managu:
Enchantment- Aura (Uncommon)
Enchant Creature
You can play this anytime you could play an instant.
Whenever enchanted creature deals combat damage, search your library for a basic land card and put it into play tapped. Shuffle your library afterwards.
"Held by the reins of mana, elves can speed the growth of nature"

I actually like this one, but the cost should be :g::u:. Blue can't get this on its own.

Tenos, Law Enforcer :3mana::w::w:
Legendary Creature- Human Advisor (Rare)
Players can't attack you, unless they pay 2 mana for each creature they control.
"Once a humble farmer from the outskirts of Bromesia, now a cold-hearted bureaucrat. Amazing how ironic life is"- Tenos's father
2/3

Probably the power is too low. What would you guys say about a 2/3? Any other suggestions would be fine.

This is better [card:695b4b9472]Ghostly Prison[/card:695b4b9472] and a beefed [card:695b4b9472]Glory Seeker[/card:695b4b9472]. I think its fine at 2/3.

Swallowing Fire :2mana::r::r:
Enchantment (Rare)
Swallowing Fire comes into play with one charge counter.
At the beginning of your upkeep, deal damage equal to the amount of charge counters to each creature.
At end of turn, put one charge counter from Swallowing Fire.
"Fire! FIRE EVERYWHERE! RETREAT!"- Vintroh, Elven Commander

Eh, nothing special. I guess this is okay.

[Yusuke]

his original was 1/3, i told him to beef XD

[Luthervamplord]

The Goblin is either a :1mana::manabr: as an uncommon or :1mana::manabr::manabr: as a common.

I agree with TGP on Mana Leash, it should never be possible for a mono blue deck to have land search and play in one card.

Again, with Tenos I have to agree with TGP. His just fine as he is, though the wording may be a bit out:

Creatures can’t attack you unless their controller pays 2 Mana for each creature attacking you. (This cost is paid as attackers are declared.)

Just a formality really as its creatures and not players who attack you, so the ability as it stands would mean creatures could still attack you.

Swallowing Fire is an interesting concept but I feel the card lacks.....Flavour, if thats the right word to use. Maybe make the ability to add a counter to it based upon a land or creature sacrifice, such as:

Swallowing Fire :1mana::r::r:
Enchantment (Rare)
Swallowing Fire comes into play with one charge counter.
At the beggining of your upkeep, Swallowing Fire deal X damage to each creature in play where X is the number of charge counters on Swallowing Fire.
Sacrifice a Land: Place a charge counter on Swallowing Fire.

You'll notice I drop the mana cost as well and this is due to the land sacrifice ability. Its such a costly ability that it drops the cost of the entire enchantment.

[Hiakashi]

Tormented Soul :manabr::manabr:
Creature - Goblin Spirit - Common
Fear, Haste
Whenever this creature attacks each player loses one life.
"Even after death, he raged"
1/1
Yep, [card:8325677f0b]Raging Goblin[/card:8325677f0b] after death. I dunno, but at two mana it could be too strong for a common, even an uncommon, maybe if it was 1(b/r)(b/r) it would be more controlled.
I like it as a :manabr: :manabr: for a 1/1 Fear, Haste. Name should maybe be: "Raging Goblin's Soul" ?? sounds better to me....


Mana Leash :managu::managu:
Enchantment- Aura - Uncommon
Enchant Creature
You can play this anytime you could play an instant.
Whenever enchanted creature deals combat damage, search your library for a basic land card and put it into play tapped. Shuffle your library afterwards.
"Held by the reins of mana, elves can speed the growth of nature"
Too similar to "One with Nature" ....... not much to say about it... the only thing that the blue goes with is the "play as an instant"....

Tenos, Law Enforcer :3mana::w::w:
Legendary Creature- Human Advisor - Rare
Players can't attack you unless they pay 2 mana for each creature they control.
"Once a humble farmer from the outskirts of Bromesia, now a cold-hearted bureaucrat. Amazing how ironic life is"- Tenos's father
1/3
Probably the power is too low. What would you guys say about a 2/3? Any other suggestions would be fine.

It was edited as a 2/3, then it had Human Advisor as a type...anyone else think: "Teysa" ? I did.....so 2/3 is a no....just so it doesn't seem too close to Teysa. for 5 mana....hmm reminds me of [card:8325677f0b]Ghostly Prison[/card:8325677f0b] so not sure how you will have that work out. (Trying not to be too picky, if I seem that way....just saying..) Well bureaucrats are what? I'd say a 1/5 or a 2/5, Much Defenseive power, but skinny? XD I like the rest of it though. :P

Swallowing Fire :2mana::r::r:
Enchantment - Rare
Swallowing Fire comes into play with one charge counter.
At the beginning of your upkeep, deal damage equal to the amount of charge counters to each creature.
At end of turn, add or remove one charge counter from Swallowing Fire.
"Fire! FIRE EVERYWHERE! RETREAT!"- Vintroh, Elven Commander
I agree with Yusuke, maybe a sacrafice of lands.....sounds better.....and it's like some Tornado thing....crazy.....:P

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Editted again! I like how the cards are looking, I might playtest them with my pals and what's missing is voting for the goblin's name.

[Luthervamplord]

Just a fun idea for a deck around Swallowing Fire:

10 Forest
10 Mountain

4 [card:4b46d0a868]Rites of Passage[/card:4b46d0a868]
4 Swallowing Fire
4 [card:4b46d0a868]Burgeoning[/card:4b46d0a868]
4 [card:4b46d0a868]Exploration[/card:4b46d0a868]
4 [card:4b46d0a868]Summer Bloom[/card:4b46d0a868]
4 [card:4b46d0a868]Vinelasher Kudzu[/card:4b46d0a868]
4 [card:4b46d0a868]Rhox[/card:4b46d0a868]
4 [card:4b46d0a868]Bird of Paradise[/card:4b46d0a868]
4 [card:4b46d0a868]Crucible of Worlds[/card:4b46d0a868]
4 [card:4b46d0a868]Energy Chamber[/card:4b46d0a868]

Simple really, Swallowing Fire is a huge borad controll and thanks to [card:4b46d0a868]Rites of Passage[/card:4b46d0a868], your own creatures will survive and get bigger. Of course your BOPS will die very quickly, but they are just in there to pull out your enchantments quickly. Once you've got an [card:4b46d0a868]exploration[/card:4b46d0a868] and [card:4b46d0a868]crucible of Worlds[/card:4b46d0a868] in play, your sitting pretty.

Just thought it might be a cool idea for a deck, and I may have to try it out.

[retarded_a_i]

:clap: lmao! Nice going! I'm looking forward to it! Thanks.

[Your Worst Nightmare]

Tormented Soul :manabr::manabr:
Creature - Goblin Spirit - Common
Fear, Haste
Whenever this creature attacks each player loses one life.
"Even after death, he raged"
1/1
Yep, [card:55af1288d2]Raging Goblin[/card:55af1288d2] after death. I dunno, but at two mana it could be too strong for a common, even an uncommon, maybe if it was 1(b/r)(b/r) it would be more controlled.
Am I the only one who thinks black shouldn't have haste, or are you thinking "Since green already has haste with Giant Solifuge, let black have some of the fun too!"... For as much I would like to say yes to this card, black doesn't have haste (not counting really old cards).

Mana Leash :managu::managu:
Enchantment- Aura - Uncommon
Enchant Creature
You can play this anytime you could play an instant.
Whenever enchanted creature deals combat damage, search your library for a basic land card and put it into play tapped. Shuffle your library afterwards.
"Held by the reins of mana, elves can speed the growth of nature"
No way! Make it :g::u: or a giant angry color pie will fall over you!

Tenos, Law Enforcer :3mana::w::w:
Legendary Creature- Human Advisor - Rare
Players can't attack you unless they pay 2 mana for each creature they control.
"Once a humble farmer from the outskirts of Bromesia, now a cold-hearted bureaucrat. Amazing how ironic life is"- Tenos's father
2/3
Probably the power is too low. What would you guys say about a 2/3? Any other suggestions would be fine.
Compare with [card:55af1288d2]Windborn Muse[/card:55af1288d2]. For one less mana, it has Flying and it's not legendary.

Swallowing Fire :1mana::r::r:
Enchantment - Rare
Swallowing Fire comes into play with one charge counter.
At the beginning of your upkeep, deal damage equal to the amount of charge counters to each creature.
Sacrifice a land: Put a charge counter on Swallowing Fire.
"Fire! FIRE EVERYWHERE! RETREAT!"- Vintroh, Elven Commander
Sacrifice enough lands and you win the game. Me likey!

:running:

[Æther Reaper]

Tormented Soul :manabr:

Creature - Goblin Spirit - Common

Fear, Haste

"Even after death, he raged"

1/1

This should be :b::manabr:. Fear is a black only ability and spirits tend to be more black in flavor than red. However, haste is not very black, so you should have the Rakdos hybrid mana in there.

Mana Leash :g::u:

Enchantment- Aura - Uncommon

Enchant Creature
You can play this anytime you could play an instant.
Whenever enchanted creature deals combat damage, search your library for a basic land card and put it into play tapped. Shuffle your library afterwards.

"Held by the reins of mana, elves can speed the growth of nature"

Very weak as is. Look at [card:41257ce565]Watchwolf[/card:41257ce565] or [card:41257ce565]Castigate[/card:41257ce565]. For two mana of two different colors, you get a card that should be worth three mana. I think it should give +1/+1.

Tenos, Law Enforcer :3mana::w::w:

Legendary Creature- Human Advisor - Rare

Players can't attack you, unless they pay 2 mana for each creature they control.

"Once a humble farmer from the outskirts of Bromesia, now a cold-hearted bureaucrat. Amazing how ironic life is"- Tenos's father

2/5

Drop this guys mana cost to :1mana::w::w:. In comparison with [card:41257ce565]Windborn Muse[/card:41257ce565], he loses flying and gains legendary and one extra mana. Since he doesn't have flying and has the drawback of being a legend, he should be less than four.

Swallowing Fire :1mana::r::r:

Enchantment - Rare

Swallowing Fire comes into play with one charge counter.
At the beginning of your upkeep, deal damage equal to the amount of charge counters to each creature.
Sacrfice a land: Put a charge counter on Swallowing Fire.

"Fire! FIRE EVERYWHERE! RETREAT!"- Vintroh, Elven Commander

Pretty good.

[retarded_a_i_wife]

:D Chris..IM TOTALLY LOST IN THIS TOPIC>>>AHAHHAHHAHAHAHHAHAH...GOOD job my love!!! 8)

[Maleficent]

Chris? God, that's 3 of them now! At least :shock: I hate my name...

I believe thee solution to zee goblin problem is quite simple. :b::r:. There you are. Red for haste, black for fear. However it may need to be beefed slightly.

As for a name on that gobbo.. eh.. I would go with something different. Can't think of much now though. Maybe ___ Goblin. A card such as that doesn't deserve a cool name like Tormented Soul :P that brings to mind some huge horror-spirit thing that likes killing and sacrificing.